Linda Lee Lyberg at Charmed Chaos posted a wonderful August Challenge poem for this month’s Casting Bricks. Her Somonka is in bold, and my completion of it follows. Everyone is welcome to join in with Jilly’s August Challenge in which we write, post and link a half poem for another poet to complete. There is great stretching of our poetic muscles in the process of collaborative writing, and tremendous fun, too. Join us!
Completing Frank Hubeny’s second Challenge for Casting Bricks took his gentle words in a love-gone-wrong direction as I focused in on the symbolism of the colors. Frank’s words are in bold. Please join us in Jilly’s August Challenge; the more, the merrier!
Lady loved the plants’ light green
With flowers brightly red.
Her face angelically serene
Had leaves to shade her head.
Lacking luck when first she loved,
gone the green; hindsight.
Wronged by fate or the hand above
red petals rage; leaves an angry blight.
The Somonka is a Japanese poetic form that is designed to be collaborative, so it is perfect that Imelda chose that as her challenge for Casting Bricks. A Somonka is a love poem in the form of two Tankas. One lover writes the first 5 lines and the other responds with a second Tanka. Imelda’s Tanka, Loss, is in bold and my response follows. Please forgive my incorrect usage of the language and my verbing of a noun.
Jilly’s August Challenge known as “Casting Bricks” is open to anyone who would care to join in; the more the merrier! There is a permalink on my right-hand side bar or you can click here for details.
Collaborative poetry has turned into a favorite for me as we move into the Casting Bricks August Challenge. I take up Jeren Nazuto’s Challenge to write an Interlocking Rubáiyát. The first half of the poem, in bold, is Jeren’s excellent groundwork which he entitled The End. Thank you to Jeren for introducing this terrific form! All are welcome to join us in the August Challenge where we write a half poem and our fellow poets complete it. Just click on the Casting Bricks side bar to the right→
The world, burning around me All the lands and the sea I weep in streams and rivers Over the fallen world tree
From the sins, the fire delivers The earth’s misguided caregivers And all the pain and suffering Fueling my body shivers
The sacrifice for my soul’s buffering
awakens, dries my tears unsuffering
the world may ash round my shoes
like fallen leaves, rustling
Lift my eyes, the horizon peruse
quell my fears, none to accuse
all glorious for eternity
body shivers there diffused
Casting Bricks is in full swing and here is my first completed poem for Jilly’s August Challenge. The title and first four lines in Common Meter were provided by Frank Hubeny at Poetry, Short Prose and Walking. Tip ‘o the hat to Frank for an excellent challenge! I really enjoyed working with this form. If you would like to get on board with the collaborative challange of Casting Bricks, take a look at my sidebar item that gives you a direct link to the August Challenge page. (Thanks to Charley at Portofino for the html assistance making that link possible!) Frank’s portion of the poem is in bold.
What’s neither dry nor frozen hard
Makes circles red with bliss
And green takes form to guide and guard
Where flows the life blood broke with grief
But love can mend with this
Water’s healing flood comes through
Casting Bricks, the August Challenge opened a few hours ago and this is my Half-Poem Challenge. Anyone is welcome to take the challenge of completing my poem and reposting the collaborative final product. Please do write a half-poem challenge of your own and post a link through the Mr. Linky on the Jilly’s August Challenge page! The more the merrier, y’all!
My Challenge Poem is a Bop. The basics are 3 stanzas with 6 lines, 8 lines, and 6 lines, with a refrain line repeated after each stanza. There are no meterical or rhyme scheme requirements for this form. I have written the first stanza, the refrain line, “Forgotten better days and a badly written play” and the first two lines of stanza two. You task is the complete the second stanza, add my refrain after it and then write the third stanza. The development of the poem is to present a problem in stanza #1, expand or explore it in stanza #2, and then either resolve or reveal a failed attempt as resolution in the last stanza. Good luck and happy poeming! ~Jilly
FORGOTTEN BETTER DAYS ( a Bop)
Smoke gathers round the rim of my coffee cup remnants of the skirmish in my untouched bowl of cereal your suitcase sits by the door, the new leather one not the weary worn green canvas with tags from our trip to Paris last summer leaving me with a million
Forgotten better days and a badly written play
Blurred words seep through the wall you on the phone with some unknown
Welcome My Poetic Friends! The NEW Casting Bricks Challenge is now open for the month of August. I am so excited about a new round of collaborative poetry. The July Challenge was a huge success, we had a great deal of fun, connected with other poets, and were stretched in our writing skills. Based on the feedback and interest expressed, we are here again for a new set of poems. Here is how it works:
Write a half poem and post it to your blog with a link or tag back to this page (Jilly’s August Challenge).
If your Challenge poem is a form (sonnet, quadrille, etc.) please state as such and give a quick review of the form or a link to a site that does that for you.
Stop by here and add your Challenge link to our Mr. Linky.
Find other Challenges that you would like to complete.
Write the 2nd half of their poem and post the entire poem to your blog.
Return here to our Mr. Linky again and post the link to that completed poem.
You may also want to put a comment on the other person’s original Challenge post to let them know you have accepted their challenge.
Spread the word! Extend the invitation to your other poet friends to join us. We are a crazy, friendly bunch, after all!
NOTE: In order to keep the links for Challenges (your half poem) different from the links for the Completed Poems, I suggest the following: When posting your Challenge half poem, post the name you would normally use along with the word ‘Challenge’ behind it. ex: Jilly Challenge.
When posting the link for a Completed Challenge, post your user name & the name of the person whose Challenge you completed. ex: Jilly Colin (if I am completing a challenge put out there by our good friend Colin Lee.)
Questions? Suggestions? Just drop it into the Comments on this page and I’ll do my best to address it.
There is no expiration on our Mr. Linky, so feel free to post new challenges and completed challenges throughout the month. Feel free to complete as many or as few challenges as you feel comfortable with. Most importantly, have fun & flex your poetic muscles! Cheers! ~ Jilly
The continuation of Casting Bricks is not forgotten. I wanted to share my plan and get any feedback you might care to include. We began with the July Challenge and I would like to continue with a once a month challenge posted on the first Friday of each month. That means our next collaborative writing challenge would post on Friday, August 4thand remain open for the entire month.
I know that I ran gleefully into completing all 11 challenge (half) poems from July, finishing them in about a week. That writing frenzy was followed by the clear dull thud of my head hitting the keyboard of my laptop! I also did not have much original poetry to my credit during that week, and while I loved the collaborative challenge and learned much from it, I like the idea of pacing myself.
We now know that our Mr. Linky works very well and that will make it all much smoother. I will give more detailed directions on August 4th for the nuts and bolts of it all.
Please feel free to extend the invitation to any poet who might be interested in joining in with Casting Bricks; the more, the merrier!
Hi my Friends & Fellow Poets! Just over a week ago Jilly’s July Challenge, “Casting Bricks” was posted and everyone was invited to join in with Collaborative Poetry. WOW! Today I set about tallying up some stats and discovered that we had:
11 Contributors (people who wrote & linked half-poems)
13 participants We wrote about 45 poems! That count is still out and y’all are still welcome to complete any of the half poem challenges that are out there. There is a list of all the Challenges on the original July Challenge page.
Also during this past week I looked into a Linky Widget to help us with a bit of reflection & feedback. I know, I know!… If I had known how much participation there would be, I would have had the incredible foresight to get the linky from the start.
My Friends, now is the chance to reflect on the July Challenge of Casting Bricks. Post your reflections & feedback and I’ll test out this cool new Linky Thing! (New to me, so expect floundering!) You are also welcome to put your reflections in Comments, but then I’ll never know if the Linky works, right?
I was stretched, poetically by this challenge. What a workout!! One of my goals was to maintain the original voice of each poem as much as possible since I have been thinking about Poetic Voice lately. I did that some of the time and failed at other times. I learned new forms and got to know a truly great group of people. Crazy, but great!
One more thing: Include in your feedback, whether via posting or commenting, if you feel like this was, 1) A Cool One-Time Event,2) Something to Consider again next July, or 3) I have a poetic/writing ‘itch’ that needs to be scratched and would like to see something a bit more permanent come from it (not necessarily in the form of collaborative poetry). I’m not candidating to host something, just letting you know I am willing if there is interest. Cheers! Jilly