Upside-down, warped butter crust resting on the speckled-like-a-robin’s-egg-if-it-weren’t-neutral brown counter-top, you lie there, golden soldiers or yellow-brick road tiles, not sure which, nearly perfect symmetry, all in a row, except for one wounded warrior who rose and rested too close to the flame of the oven, with a lightly bruised and burned shoulder, but all else the same as the rest, yet it is what makes you stand out from the rest, catching my eye, wondering if I see mold, no, it’s not mold, just an injury that makes you the slice I leave behind when I make turkey sandwiches for our Thursday lunch, in hopes that you will be, instead, singled out for a solitary honor, like toast or better yet, a crustless straw hat where that ugly birthmark can be shaved off – it’s painless, I promise – and you will be glorious like the others, no, more so, because they shall continue to be all lined up, yellow-gold, bland, white bread squares, one sandwich like any other, and you alone shall be the Marilyn Monroe with that beauty mark, or I could just turn the loaf over, set it up-right, hiding your shame, pretending I see only the tops, each one perfectly Orwellian like the others, wonderful rectangle of tan, lines demarking the individuality that would spill out like dominoes if I slid the plastic wrapper off with the flourish of a magician all at once, showing off your nakedness, breaking down the barriers of the loaf into its geometric components.
dragonflies hatching
rise from the lake to follow
their own curved road to Oz
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qbit is our guest-host at dVerse this week for Haibun.
I like those dragonflies on their way to Oz.
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Thanks, Frank! They do seem mythical, don’t they?
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That slice of bread we leave… tho one that one I think we often leave to be thrown in the garbage… I almost pity the less perfect, but myself I usually take that shoulder piece (unless it’s covered with mold)
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This reads like a stream of consciousness and I am inhaling it in 1 big gulp, before hungrily biting into a sandwich. Love the share Jilly, including the dragonflies hatching in the haiku part.
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I agree with Grace about the steam-of-conscious quality of your prose, Jill. I love the ‘ golden soldiers or yellow-brick road tiles’ and the echo of Oz in the haiku, and feel sorry for the ‘wounded warrior who rose and rested too close to the flame of the oven’. My husband took up baking bread some months ago – he won’y eat shop-bought bread now – and we have so many sacks of different types of flour spilling out of the cupboard! But oh, the smell and taste of that bread! My favourite part is:’lined up, yellow-gold, bland, white bread squares, one sandwich like any other, and you alone shall be the Marilyn Monroe with that beauty mark’.
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Oooh! Homemade bread is one of the great things of this world. Lucky you!
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read and re-read til I could see every crumb of imperfection – the Marilyn Monroe mole was just peachy. Brilliant Jilly
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You are rocking the stream of consciousness thing at the moment. It’s amazing to watch you letting go like that. I love the intensity of your gaze in this.
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Thanks! Been working on stream of conscious writing for several months – very liberating
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You write a haibun as a tease, with prose as crisp and free as after dinner banter–making me, at least, pine for reading more of your work. Stream-of-consciousness can lead to magical places and spaces; really enjoyed this.
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Really appreciate that, Glenn
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The dragonflies are delightful, and I will follow them next time. I have to say the description of the bread is very well done.
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This is so good, with full points for “you alone shall be the Marilyn Monroe ” Ahahah! And shame! Wonderfully unexpected and a great rising yeast of words. Not a blemish in sight after all.
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Oh, how iconic and beautiful, Jilly! I love it! The way you blend a stream-of-consciousness prose, with its extended metaphors and sharp imagery, with the elegance of your concluding haiku. Awesome write! 🙂
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Now that is the most detailed description of a loaf of bread that I have ever heard. Loved all your details… mold and all!
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Very yeasty of you to stop by and have a sandwich with me! 😉
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Ha!
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Thank you! It was pure fun
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This is a remarkable write, Jilly! The meditation on the gem among the mundane. Your slice is the hero, marked — like Harry, like Bilbo, like Frodo — set aside by the mark for adventure. No everyday lunch for this one. No, not those others, but Dorothy set on a golden road (straw hat of Oz)! This one will break free, dragonfly-like, and soar!
A star is baked.
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Exactly! A Hero Journey. Great analysis, Charley! Terribly literary, my dear 🙂
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I’m so glad. I’m never certain of my interpretations.
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kaykuala
I slid the plastic wrapper off with the flourish
of a magician all at once, showing off your
nakedness, breaking down the barriers of
the loaf into its geometric components.
Talking of a simple loaf but in Hank’s imagination, the rise of a beautiful
lady with no weapons but the attraction of her classic body structure to
conquer the world – faced with small components of easy meat – the
unsuspecting males!
Classic write Jilly!
Hank
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Love your take on this, Hank! The reader completing the poem is so exciting. Thanks for sharing.
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singled out for a solitary honor, – I am looking at my loaf in a new unconventional way now.
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Never thought of your bread as a hero, huh? LOL!
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nope! not till your poem!
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How you make those mundane slices into an poetic extravaganza including Marilyn Monroe! Epic!
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Thanks! I was stuck for an idea until I walked into the kitchen and there it was. Go figure! 🙂
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Aha. That loaf! 😊
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Your conversation with your yeasty “wounded warrior” here is inspiring me to, not only go make a sandwich, but to write freely, at a pace where only (ironically) meditation can take us. And my favorite descriptor of the loaf was it being “perfectly Orwellian.”
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Thank you for seeing that allusion!
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Wow, a comprehensible, excellent stream-of consciousness!
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