She
there in the door
way beyond any other
sigh
He
there are the bar
staking his hero journey
her
Eyes
scanning the room
she glances over you
smiles
Eyes
watching her move
he follows her with his eyes
prey
You
here on the wall
you see them plotting their moves
die
They
there in the night
picture it all in your mind
cry
You
here in your room
wanting to foil their delight
try
Eyes
turning away
for a watched plot never foils
comply
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Join me, my friends, as I host Poetics tonight at dVerse! We will be twisting adages and you are invited to flock with other poets to write and read poetry, and maybe discover that great things come in blog packages. 🙂
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‘staking his hero journey’ – brilliant line.
phew – glad the plot was foiled! am going to try and addle an addage
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Thanks, Laura! Look forward to it!
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Nice twist in the last one with that “watched plot never foils”.
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Thank you, Frank!
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Oh….this is so well done, Jilly! I love following the plot….the last single italicized word in each stanza….and then the “twist” of the adage in the end! PS: such a great prompt! I really had fun with it. Shall publish now, since yours is already here 🙂
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Thanks! This was fun to write and I enjoyed reading yours!
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Really like the way this unfolds. Looking forward to the challenge.
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Looking forward to seeing you there – your writing is always excellent!
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Thank you so much, Jilly
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Oh yes… really love how this ended… a good thing when the plot fails just because we observe…
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Thanks! I wasn’t honestly sure of how it ended… got all twisted up in it. HAHA!
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Th is was a fun read, Jill, and I love ‘a watched plot never foils’! I also like the pun:
‘there in the door
way beyond any other’.
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So glad you spotted that, Kim 😉
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Ah yes, levity & fun for Poetics Tuesday. Your poem is all aces, smoky and Victorian, tinged with melodrama very creative prompt–thanks for hosting
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My pleasure, Glenn. Glad you joined in!
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“a watched plot never foils” … Oh, gosh. That is a really good twist!
This reminds me of a Taylor Swift song … Of course! Everything does. 🙂
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Ha! You’re right – hadn’t thought of it!
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Plots always foil me, watched intently or not. I like the story. You should write the denouement (without looking at it).
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Form, pacing, drama, and a marvelous pun. Your poem has it all! Great take.
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🙂 Thanks!
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Bravo! Like this life as a voyeur!
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🙂
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Brilliant twists, Jilly! I especially love the last one: “a watched plot never foils…” Excellent write!
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Thank you 🙂
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My pleasure! 🙂
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“for a watched plot never foils” – perfect. I didn’t see that coming at all, lol! Love the hero line as well.
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Thanks! This one was fun to write.
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It takes a lot of courage or a lot of drinks to become that vulnerable in front of everyone in the bar!
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You know what they say, “The (ugly) women all get prettier at closing time!” Great poem.
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Haha! Thanks, Dwight!
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cleverly pace and paced Jilly, like a dialogue and dance coordinated so well
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Thanks, Gina! This was fun to write.
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that ending! Jilly you nailed this, and I agree. I enjoyed the flow of your words very much.
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Thanks for your generous words, my friend!
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I loved your twist at the end. Well done! 🙂
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Thanks so much!
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You’re welcome, Jilly.
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SMiLes
Human
Nature
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AdAge ReNeWeD
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WHaT is..:)
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Thanks for stopping by! 🙂
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My pleasure
Jilly.. Thanks
For the
Inspiring
Poetry
And
Great Prompt too..:)
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So well done.
Loved this prompt. Thank you so much.
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