Maureen Sudlow has accepted my Renga Challenge! We will complete our ten-couplets here. If you have not stopped by Maureen’s beautiful blog, kiwissoar, I highly recommend it! She shares poetry and photos and her quest with painting. Her New Zealand photographs are a highlight of my days. My opening couplet is inspired by one of her posts.
Like sweet peas in water colors
echoes cross the river
evening cloud
a rainbow bleeds into the sea
tinting the sun in primary hues
drying too quickly to deny the ache
ripples on the water
the emptiness of space
reverberating in time
with the heron’s solitary call
beyond the path of the whale
footprints of seabirds along the sands
breach from my throat in warbled tones
a solo song of love’s unrest
until, like love
the echoes fade, and die
to rupture again, and again
in clouds of ash and iron and mud
Join us at Jilly’s January Challenge of Casting Bricks to Attract Jade for some collaborative poetry; everyone is welcome!
Great opening!!!!
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Thank you! It’s inspired by a watercolor painting that Maureen Sudlow posted recently. I’m taking all Challengers 😉
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evening cloud
a rainbow bleeds into the sea
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Oh, that is nice! I’ll update and work on my next couplet. Welcome to the Renga!
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Thanks
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“tinting the sun in primary hues
drying too quickly to deny the ache”
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ripples on the water
the emptiness of space
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Ah! You are good at this, Maureen! Updating and musing.
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it’s good for me…
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“reverberating in time
with the heron’s solitary call”
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beyond the path of the whale
footprints of seabirds along the sand
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nice!
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“breach from my throat in warbled tones
a solo song of love’s unrest”
We are down to the last few couplets, so our challenge is to bring it full circle!
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until, like love
the echoes fade, and die
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Oooh! Love this!
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was worried it might seem depressing…
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Sorry for my delay. Been swamped this week, but free time coming up! I want to give the whole poem careful thought before hitting the last couplets.
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Here is my last couplet – you are charged with wrapping this up! (I went symbolic.)
“to rupture again, and again
in clouds of ash and iron and mud”
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and the darkness falls
but the song goes on, forever
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Oooooh! Nice ender! I’ll update soon…
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It turned out beautifully, Maureen! I’m especially partial to your first couplet and your closer. What a delight to work with you!
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Thanks Jilly. I absolutely loved doing this. Thanks for asking
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I’m so glad you joined in – it is my pleasure to collaborate with such a gifted poet!
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