What would I know
if I fell, naked,
into the grass
and did not get up for days?
What would I taste
if I waded, bare-armed,
through the cold stream
and did not drink for years?
What would I dream
if I swam, web-footed,
over the volcanic mountains
and did not inhale eternity,
that dangles between each
collision of pulse beats?
© Jilly’s All Rights Reserved
This is Day 27 of November and while I have not met my goal to post each day, I have been writing and editing each day. A tip of the hat to my ‘editors’ who patiently worked through this one with me. Any weakness in this poem is solely the fault of this writer. 🙂
Linking to dVerse Open Link Night!
Collision of heartbeats! I love it!!
Dwight
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Thank you, Dwight!
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I love the way your questions lead the poet… and the reader back to the answer given at the start! The path leads forward and comes back upon itself. Great write, Jilly!
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It does? Oh, yeah…right. Exactly what I meant. 😉 Thanks, Charley.
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Too funny!
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I just saw that too! I’m slow!
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That came out great. The inhalation of eternity!!
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Thanks. I had help.
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I believe you would know many things worth knowing.
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I see a journey of growing in your words… sometimes we have to do all those thing just to have the words coming out.
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Gotta get muddy to write!
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I feel you know so much already by stepping into these dreams and I love your ‘ eternity that dangles between each collision of pulse beats’ xxx
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Thank you – that last bit was the hardest to edit and whittle down to the pure essence. Too much blood and sweat over those words. Haha!
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I liked this – the questions set it up really well.
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Thank you! Always more questions than answers.
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I love that third verse. Beautiful!
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Thank you – this poem was hard fought. I’ll stop by your world of art soon!
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I look forward to it. Thanks for the reply!
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love the questions especially inhaling eternity!
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Thanks! Deep breath…
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I love the questions specially the last. Very imaginative and takes the reader to the unknown ~
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Thank you, Grace. I value your insight.
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Whoa, are you ready to ask these questions and go order your life in such a way that will answer them? You are brave and it seems you’ve already ventured into vast space “between each collision” of Q and A.
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Perhaps that explains my propensity for going barefoot and getting muddy! Haha! Thanks for reading, Amaya
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Very nice – three challenging questions – particularly the last. Liked the use of the unexpected image – ‘bare armed’ rather than ‘barefooted’ through the stream – cleverly suggests just how deep this stream is.
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Thanks, Peter. I’m always intrigued by the unexpected.
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What a wonderful way of imagining the unimaginable – pure poetry
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Thanks, Laura! I’ll be by to read after work.
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I like the eternity dangling between pulse beats.
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Thanks! That was the line that beat me up trying to be written.
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Exquistely apt title for your poem.
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Thank you, Nan. It was a Merriam-Webster Word-of-the-Day and the writing flowed from it. Crazy muse!
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What would become of you, indeed. You always take me on a mind- trip with your words. Excellent!
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Thanks, Vivian! (cheaper than drugs, huh?) 🙂
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Absolutely! 🙂
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I like the ending! It brings the entire poem home and makes it less ethereal, more concrete. This is a great poem that reminds me to truly be alive and not just exist.
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Thank you, Jenna! Good distinction between alive and exist. I appreciate your comments.
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Brilliant, Jilly! Just stunning in immediacy and raw honesty! Love it!
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Thank you. Raw honesty – what every poet strives for.
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This speaks of both intimate knowledge and longing to me. Maybe a thirst for knowing oneself? Beautiful writing. 💜
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Exactly, Angela! Thanks for stopping by
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My pleasure.
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