he loved a linear girl
unswerving in his gape-jawed puppy love
so easy to be stunned
like tasering him with one look
in his stream of consciousness
falling, fleeing those cliché arrows, aimed
by her apparatus of love
to land just short of his path
to trudge through
a flock of poison dart frogs singing with glee
for his one life
the almosts and wish-it-were-so’s
those mean summer
nightly chorus’s of want and yearning of
dreams playing music
once more throttling back into his arms
of want and yearn
intermittently broken and repaired
© Jilly’s All Rights Reserved
Paul over at dVerse challenges us to write this wonderfully musical form. Join us and give Contrapuntal Poetry a try!
Dang that’s good!
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Thanks! (Serious doubts)
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How can you have doubts about a poem that shoots poison dart frogs as Cupid’s arrows!
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This sounds like a relationships in serious trouble.. you cannot beg to be loved.
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A dance of love so precariously poised..will they won’t they…a story of all time and things. Wonderful.
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Thank you!
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Ill-fated, though those kinds of relationships seem to be most enchanting. I like how you did this with the jumping of “want and yearn” from one side to the other. That really gives the texture of counterpoint.
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Thanks! I really enjoyed working on this one.
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I like the ebb and flow the two poems create, like a relationship in its form.
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🙂
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Whistles!!!💜💜💜
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Thanks!
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This is so clever! I love the recurring theme of ‘want and yearn’.
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Nice description of those mean summer dreams.
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Wow!
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Those last seven line knit this poem together and yet the two stand on their own. WOW this was good.
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Thank you so much!
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I think this one really is contrapuntal, Jilly! Nicely done, this rhythmic dance of infatuation.
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Thanks, Merril! I really enjoy this form but struggled to write it this week.
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Well, worth the struggle. 😉
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Oh Jilly….so well done. I love all three “melody lines” here….but most especially the first seven lines when read in total. And the title is just brilliant!
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Thank you!
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kaykuala
once more throttling back into his arms
of want and yearn
intermittently broken and repaired
It has to go through a maze of hope and niceties along the way before the final curtain perhaps!
Hank
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