qbit has taken up my Renga Challenge – it is bound to be…interesting; stick around! Jilly’s January Challenge of Casting Bricks to Attract Jade is in full swing. Join us; everyone is welcome!
Like sweet peas in water colors
echoes cross the river
Our dung, our beetled life, our turvey sleep,
we fall into carapaces and disjointed limbs
Guttering wings
grid of prophecies emeralding mold
Divined by eyes upon our backs
that see us once, see us twice
Skittering wake caroms,
threatens our sight; our sight
Our slight, slightest, lightest
saucy flight our taste of heaven
Indigo’s bitter blue
crushes, crunches veins of penicillin
Skewered through the helix,
twinned and twined to origins
Euphrates yellows our canvas
diminished chords return unanswered
Tigris Tigris burning bright
our garden silenced by such fire.
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“Guttering wings
grid of prophecies emeralding mold”
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“divined by eyes upon our backs
That see us once, see us twice “
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Hmmm…. so, basically this is bleu cheese with vision.
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Sort of Buffalo Wild Wings, but moths instead of chicken?
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snort!
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Snorting, wild and furious with their newness.
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pawing the air with mustang grace
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LOLOL!
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Blue cheese buffalo mustang moths
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Howling!!!! I think we should just ditch the Renga and run the comments!!! (Tears!)
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Ahahaha! Absolutely.
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“Skittering wake caroms,
threatens our sight; our sight”
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NICE!!!!!
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THAT is high praise! (Is there a snorting, pawing moth with sauce in your next?)
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My god — moth sauce. Don’t you dare! And didn’t I already try that with that crushed flight of the monarchs I did a while back? LOL
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“our slight, slightest, lightest
saucy flight our taste of heaven”
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Very saucy couplet!
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You started it…
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I only snorted; the rest is yours…
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“indigo’s bitter blue
crushes, crunches veins of penicillin”
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Back to moldy bugs! When do we get peas and watercolors again, LOL!
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It’s all yours – bring it back in line!
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“shivered through the helix,
Twinned and twined to origins “
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The Return of the Helix! This is good…
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Is “skewered” better than “shivered”?
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It is more vilolent; more active… are you ok to let me decide based on where it takes me for my next?
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You have the pen!!!
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Ah – Weapon of Mass Persuasion! I’ll crunch & muse…
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“Euphrates yellows our canvas
diminished chords return unanswered”
*Using Skewered in your previous couplet
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Finally some music! And I have to
rattle some bones in just one line??
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Rattle away, or feel free to go back and make changes to anything.
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Hum de dum… Tigris eyes?
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Tigger, Pooh, Piglet… whatever works for you (LOL!)
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Might throw in with Bake…
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? lost me there…
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Hahahaha, Blake, not bake. Fat fingered it. But bake has possibilities too.
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Ah! Tigger, tigger, burning bright, in the Hundred Acre Woods of the night…
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Ahahaha! Hahahaha! Tears! Oh my lord.
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LOL! (Perhaps it helps that I’ve had a fever for the last 2 days?)
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“Tigris Tigris burning bright
Our garden silenced by such fire.”
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Oh, man! Brilliant, blazing! This Renga needed poetic allusion and you murdered it!!! I’ll update the post.
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Great. This was a lot of fun too. I can’t get over “Tigger Tigger” though.
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That’s where I was yeterday with B Dubs and the moth. Laughed until I cried! All updated – do you see any editing issues?
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lowercase the capital “T” on that. You’ve finally shamed me into paying attention to these, LOL!
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Capital D, though? (Hanging out with Engish teachers can be hazardous to your health, baby!)
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Your call.
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Perfect!
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Reblogged this on qbit and commented:
Wild ride Renga by Jilly and me. Hold on to your hats, and enjoy the creative process on the comments!
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I like how weird and experimental these renga have become!
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Me, too! Would love for you to join in if you get the chance.
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