“In painting
he was sincere”
(Quack)
I was skillful
in the supreme madness
that accosted me
Impossible!
Fools are
insufferably
nothing,
possessed of black silk drawing
The bells jingled
It is nothing.
I shall not die
of proper caution
Azure fangs imbedded
seize the drops of moisture
fierce
I broke.
© Jilly’s All Rights Reserved
Taken from A Cask of Amontillado by Edgar Allen Poe
Posted for dVerse where we are writing erasure or black-out poetry.
I LOVE the last four lines.
I broke too!
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Thank you!
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Oh I do love what you got from Poe… another horror altogether, though that death described in the cask of Amontillado I can still remember.
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Yes, horror begets horror.
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Nice reading! I like the phrase: “Fools are
insufferably
nothing”
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Thank you,Frank. I was just sort of handed the words…
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This is so good, Jill! You know I love me some Poe, and I absolutely love what you did with this! I might be able to wrangle something for this prompt.
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Yay!!!
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I rarely admit defeat, but I have never been able to get erasure, black out or whatever poetry. I look on in admiring silence.
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One must get in touch with your inner child – it’s a bit like throwing a tantrum in my estimation. Glad you are here, Jane!
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It’s certainly a form of letting go. It also looks like hard work… Me and hard work don’t get on too well.
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Wait… You do magnetic poetry. It’s like that, only you get more words.
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But you can’t change the order! I just did one, since you pointed out that it’s a bit like playing with the magnets, and I think I find writing sonnets easier!
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I couldn’t figure out your source, but it is so Poe-esque. Poe is perfect for Halloween. Chilling.
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My source is down at the bottom of the post and your instincts are spot-on. I ordered a fine wine for a reason – perhaps Amontillado. 🙂
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I did see the source when I read it–great choice.
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We always want “mo po” and this fills the bill!
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Never enough Po! Thanks, Bev.
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Just lovely and your voice/performance left me laughing. Bravo.
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Thank you! I had fun with it. I can do insanity – scary thought 🙂
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Jilly, you put this together beautifully- but hearing you read it out… priceless!!
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Thanks, Vivian!
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You’re welcome!
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Seems Poe is contagious this time of year! Great write, Jilly! And once again, you emulate the haikai spirit! Thanks!
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High praise!
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Your reading made your words come alive ~ This line means a great deal: I shall not die
of proper caution
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Thank you, Grace.
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That was wonderful. But I couldn’t play the sound file…
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Hmmm… never had anyone not be able to acces the cloud. Sorry; it’s outrageous.
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Working now. Great! “I shall not die / of proper caution” is my favorite.
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Yeah, I liked how that fell together. Poe is a terrific source.
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I love the title, Jill, and how you have encapsulated the essence of Poe, especially in the lines:
‘I was skillful
in the supreme madness’
and
‘possessed of black silk drawing’.
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You killed the form, Jilly! Great audio too 🙂
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Thanks, Lynn! Fun stuff
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