A circle within
The well of infrequent tongues
Radius opens
Fibonacci sequences
Spiraling my fingertips
Primitive riddles
In sunflower’s eye are held
Voices sing out loud
The universe is dancing
Steps of fractal precision
Ribbons of crystal-
line explosions expanding
Inward gravitas
Outward, a centrifugal
Joy in movement, energy
Dark vitality
A matter of mystery
God’s hands compressing
We are gravity’s children
Held in eternal embrace
The circle contracts
Celestial hymn intones
Radial refrain
Time, space, matter energy –
Double helix corkscrewing.
A Classic Renga by two amazing poetess divas; Jilly & Sarah Southwest! Interested in joining in with some collaborative poetry? Join us over at Jilly’s October Challenge of Casting Bricks to attract Jade; everyone is welcome!
Fibonacci sequences
Spiralling my fingertips
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Nice!
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My next:
“Primitive riddles
In sunflower’s eye are held
Voices sing out loud”
(I was insane to undertake the Haiku! It is the bane of my existence!)
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The universe is dancing
Steps of fractal precision
Your haikus are fantastic! I have been counting and re-counting syllables. This is really quite interesting.
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Agreed! Primitively riddles was great. Dancing in fractal precision is too – since fractals are precisely chaotic.
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Thank you! I find this most mad and moonly, especially on the birthday of ee. (Must plan some disorder in the face of all this order.)
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Fractals! Yes! I need the chaos to keep from drowning in Haikus! (Cue your line: “OH, Wah! Jilly, quit whining, already and write!” tee hee)
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This couplet is so perfect, Sarah! Working on my next. You are such a talented writer 🙂
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It’s so nice to get a compliment from someone whose work I really admire 😌 Thank you
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“ribbons of crystal-
line explosions expanding
inward gravitas”
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Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #8: Jilly and Sarah Southwest latest classic #renga!
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Outward, a centrifugal
Joy in movement, energy
You’ve just had me asking my son for details of quantum stuff. This is hard! And hardcore. Nearly there…
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What? I don’t get this stuff, either! But we are learning…
Nice couplet 🙂 This takes us to the last two Tankas, so the ‘how’ of wrapping up is upon us.
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I’ve just realised I will have to do the very last lines! We seem to be expanding like the universe here.
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Indeed; I’m working on something to define all of this… The Fibonacci Sequences keeps calling me back and I may do a bit of editing on the sunflower line that will help. Are you okay with a slight departure from pure science?
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“Dark vitality
Matter of mystery, hands
of God compressing”
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We are gravity’s children
Held in eternal embrace
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Oh! Oh! Perfect!
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This couplet and the Haiku are flipping great.
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🙂
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Thank you! It’s great working with Jilly 😊 I’m really enjoying both my collaborations.
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I need to pop over to your other one – haven’t been there since the first 2 couplets. Our game clock is ticking and I’m frozen in mid-shot… bounce, bounce, bounce…
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I’m upping my game every time here!
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That’s the best part of these things for me- I have to become better. (I also become crazier!!)
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So, I am taking Haiku advice from Q on this and will be tweaking a couple of my lines… shouldn’t change anything as far as content, just format.
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Fine. Though I think your haikus are great!
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His suggestion is to make each line stand on its own, so I am changing the last one slightly… May also make a tweak to the Sunflower line…
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Only just catching up here! Wow!!!
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🙂 Sarah and I are good for each other! Not sure if you saw how I changed my last one. What say you to the Dark vitality stanza?
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Yes!!
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My final Haiku:
“The circle contracts
Celestial hymn intones
Radial refrain”
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Double helix corkscrewing –
Time, space, matter, energy.
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Or maybe –
Time, space, matter energy –
Double helix corkscrewing.
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Yes! Fabulous closer, Sarah! Wooo hooo!!!
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Faaaaantastic!
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Thanks! Way out of my comfort zone here, but poetic skydiving, nonetheless!
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Skydiving with knives up next, LOL!
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WAAA!
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I’m really pleased with this. Physics AND metaphysics! I think we circle around something about the fundamentals of life here. It has been great to do this with you. I’m enjoying the whole collaboration thing a lot 😊
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I’m so glad you are diving in with the collaborations, Sarah. So, what is the grater message here? I need to go back and read it all again slowly.
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Interesting question. I wonder how our interpretations will vary? For me, it makes me think about the fact that the infinite variety and beauty of Life, the Universe and Everything are down to a relatively small number of apparently simple rules. From them come the spirals in a sunflower, the stars, us…
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Great summation! The small number of rules that order everything. Wrapping up with the DNA strand was essential! I think I went more spiritual on it with the dark matter/dark energy being the hands of God and your line about being held in the embrace of gravity. The thing I was reaching for (and missing) in the sunflower line was the 3rd eye / seat of the soul concept in the human brain where the Fibonacci sequence occurs. Reading again, I am amazed at how well we played this; you challenge me!
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