He travels
through episodes
of marginalia
lavishly neglecting
the peel, where flavor
resides, instead sucking
insensibility from the flesh
spraining his ankle
on the pocked
surface of the pit
© Jilly’s All Rights Reserved
He travels
through episodes
of marginalia
lavishly neglecting
the peel, where flavor
resides, instead sucking
insensibility from the flesh
spraining his ankle
on the pocked
surface of the pit
© Jilly’s All Rights Reserved
I love the way you send this man on a voyage, unprepared to take in “where flavor resides.” He is left, like many of us, on a whirlwind tour of “episodes of marginalia.” He’s missing the meat of life (or vegetables), instead “sucking insensibility.” Too true! Too real! I’d take the hint!
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Thanks for your insight!
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I was along for his ride, Jilly, and loved it when he tripped on the pit. Serves him right. Great extended metaphor!
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Thanks, Sarah. Been writing character sketches this weekend. Must be time to return to fiction.
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Very cool. Just pulled me right in and along.
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I’m wondering if it’s a bad sign that noir-like writing is popping off my pen just now… 😉
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😊
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Also, “episodes of marginalia” and
“lavishly neglecting the peel” are wonderful.
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🙂
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Excellent. Love the physicality of twisting the ankle in the pit.
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Hmm- physicality – something to keep in mind. Appreciate your input.
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The imagery of voyage and excellent poetic craft. 🙂
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Thank you, Charlie! Nice to see you 🙂
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You welcome, Jilly.
I’ve been here all this time…I just take a few days break and come back. And speaking of coming back I posted a new poem yesterday and this one is a bizarre poem. One which you’ll need to use Google as your dictionary source. 🙂
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Wait… YOU say it is bizarre? This I have to see!
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🙂 You’ll find out.
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Oh Jilly, what a luscious trip!
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Ah! HaHaHa! Gets my vote for punniest comment ever! … and thanks. 🙂
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😉
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Episodes of marginalia—that’s a new one. This man has lost life’s flavour. Maybe that’s why he sprained his ankle!
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Thanks for reading, Vivian!
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You’re welcome!
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