“Words are moving water, muddy, clear, or both” ~ Jim Harrison
From Songs of Unreason, this is the quote for day 20 of the 28 Days of Unreason. Here are my words in response, entitled Travelling Without Fare.
Colors of waves
in her coffee cup
very specific
create depression
(forbidden transfer)
Making her think
“Worry about me”
The silence fades
first
roiling the waters
of the approaching
divide
It was simple
at first
until the excess
of the sweetest
whys
bubbled up
Froth
No sugar
Jilly's 
‘Froth, no sugar’ that’s life, isn’t it?
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All too often!
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🙂
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Maybe it is my jet lag, but I’m not getting the first part at all. Everything from “it’s simple” works fine, and is quite good. Just not enough handholds for me before that. Did I miss something?
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Possibly you are too sane? Take a glance at the tags for help and then read what I am about to write in response to C below.
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This is getting adictive 🙂
https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/2017/08/05/leaky-but-not-broken/
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Adiction, madness, too much coffee – I speak those languages fluently!
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That’s me, except for the coffee 🙂
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The psychology of colors, of transference, and of coffee. Deep, deep reading… froth but no sugar! “Worry about me” is the key? Or am I off-key?
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You are certainly looking at this from one perspective – you, the reader’s filters, are still king in poetry. However, if you want to understand what the poet voice is saying, think about the context of the title; she is travelling here and she does not have fare. Not only that, but she is denied transfer – stuck on that bus/train. Also, silence of the mind is a luxury of sanity, so if the silence is the first thing to fade…
The ‘whys’ are sweet and yet, it ends with no sugar = no answers. People who have ever dealt with depression or the like may be more likely to get this poem.
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That makes total sense. I know your enjoyment of, and background in psychology. …so I basically winged it! 🙂 Now I get the transfer reference.
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Hmmm – must consider looking at Transfer from the Psych perspective. Got me thinking…
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Okay, so I’m not totally off– wrong.
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