Playing fast & loose with the punctuation in the prompt at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads.
Bang your dead wood out to the curb for the garbage collector
Burning it would only sting your eyes
Bang your photos of old loves out to the dust bin
Keeping them in that bottom drawer only attracts mold
Bang your old records onto the rubbish heap
Playing them only encourages that skip
Bang those words that she said to the river
Letting them live would only give them breath
Bang those chronic patterns to the breakneck bonfire
Letting them smolder only burns your feet
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Nice! Nice! Nice! Love it!!!
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Banging great energy, form, language, thought.
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Bangingly glad you like it!
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Haha, witty take on the words of the prompt. Proof that commas matter! 😉 “I love cooking my dog and my grandma….”
Beautiful back and forth dialogue poem. Deep meanings that warrant another reading… or three.
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Thank you, Charley.
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You did a bang up job on this prompt!
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HA HA HA!!!! Thank you, Lynn! You’re the best!
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I like the way the second line adds meaning to the first of each stanza.
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Thank you, Kerry! I heard it in my head as a conversation with self. Glad you stopped by for a read!
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You did a great job with this! I love the twist on the punctuation.
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Thank you, my friend!
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Strong statements indeed! Just what the prompt called for.
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Thank you! I value the feedback.
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We are what we are and what we did and were in the past. Throw those tangible memories away but still that very same person remains with you.
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Exactly. My mind tracked to those things that we cling to, things that become patterns that are like dead wood. Thanks for reading!
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Yes, strong statements. Bang away that which holds us.
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Precisely! Thanks for reading 🙂
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I love this conversation…..sage advice.
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Thanks, Sherry!
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Really liked the fast pace to your poem and how I can relate to those things we try to dump. Fun too, to read.
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Glad you enjoyed it, Julian!
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I just read about a lady who worked her life to dead-clean. Leaving nothing when she dies… maybe it’s the same sense I get here.
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This is bang on brilliant!❤️
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Ooo! Love that comment 🙂 Thank you!
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And…bang, you’re dead! I see what you did there! 😉
–coal (Fireblossom)
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