It looked like you, running after it along the bank I called to it just as it swirled into a small eddy and sank A shrike called from the far shore as a fragment of pebble lodged between my left sandal and heel driving its dull bladed beak into my spleen © Jilly 2016 Day 17 of 28 Days of Unreason
Hi Jill, don’t think I’ve been here before… I like the notion of synchronicity in this and will be back for more.. With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
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Thanks, Scott!
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I really enjoy the poetic ambiguity of the last phrase (or, perhaps, just my denseness), where I’m left to wonder how the shrike (or the pebble) managed to vent your spleen. It is a powerful poem!
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Thank you!
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Don’t you just love (and just grind your teeth) when it floats by too fast for you to catch it…
This is a great poem, smiles ~
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I agree with what Grace has said 😀 this is an exquisite poem.
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Thank you, Sanaa!
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Lovely poem !
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Thank you!
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Good stuff.. beautifully crafted.
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Enjoying the sillier Jilly poems very much. “…into my spleen” Too much! 😉
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I really love it. The last stanza that almost seems macabre… Like a body beneath the surface… Truly one way of finding inspiration
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Oh the pebble that lodges in our shoe — and we must walk on and on and on and it grinds and pierces and seems to find its irritation to our very soul. Your words took me to an interesting place this AM!
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So glad!
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I had to look up “shrike” so now I know something new. Cute little bird.
Some poems and words just manage to escape us…
I really liked this. 🙂
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Thanks! The thing about a shrike is that they kill other birds. It’s a bit gruesome. They are called a predatory song bird. Thanks for reading!
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I enjoyed this muchly, venting your spleen.
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Thank you!
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